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Star Trek: Exodus

skynyrd04

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Report this Jan. 08 2011, 9:47 pm

Remember - I just think these up to help me fall asleep. So if they're no good - Be nice.  And if you have any ideas for stand alone episodes they would be appreciated.


Title: Star Trek: Exodus
-The first time out many asked if there was any significance to the name coming from the Bible. Some what. The Israelites wandered the wilderness for 40 years, and faced lack of resources, internal strife, and external threats. In this Trek story the crew is exploring a wilderness type region of space and dealing with similar issues. There’s also the long running arc of the Aurelians finding a new home world. But really Exodus just sounded cool. Although, I confess due to their unusual sound, I do sometimes use less familiar Biblical names.

Premise: It's been 1 year since the failed Reman coup on Romulus. The new Romulan pro-consul has taken a pro-Federation line and has signed a new non-aggression pact with the Federation. This opens up a vast new region of space called the Great Divide to exploration. This region previously lay untouched because it touches the borders of the Federation, Romulan Empire, Cardassian Union, Breen Confederacy, and Ferengi Alliance. Due to all these competing claims no one power ventured into the Divide, for fear of sparking a confrontation. With the Breen and Cardassians relatively docile following the Dominion War, and the Romulans now a somewhat tenuous ally, the Federation can start to scout and explore this region. They send a small scout ship, the Exodus, captained by Joseph Reyes, to begin this new venture.

Main Cast:
Captain Joseph Reyes: Hispanic male, about 40 years old. Reyes could best be described as a fighter. That's why he was promoted to captain during the Dominion War, StarFleet needed a fighter. Now, many admirals regret their choice to promote Reyes. He sees his new assignment as some sort of veiled exile. But, his only remaining friend at StarFleet command, Admiral Janeway, (who I tossed in as a cameo in the first episode) tells him to take this chance to find a new direction in life. *I see Benjamin Bratt in this role, just my pick.

Commander Eric Allen: White male, about 30. Allen serves as Reyes' first officer. Like Reyes he served in the Dominion War, but he lost more than a few years of his life to it. He was onboard the Centaur the day it was attacked (as seen in DS9 "Behind the Lines"). While he escaped with the rest of his crew he lost his left arm, collarbone, ribs, and lungs due to the impact of his escape pod crash. Now all those parts of his body are prosthetic, and it’s taken him 3 years to get back some normalcy. His starched-shirt, by-the-book style clashes with Reyes' devil-may-care attitude.

Lt. Vess - Vulcan female, about 30. Vess is the Exodus' third in command, and chief engineer. Reyes didn't want a Vulcan engineer claiming lack the creativity a good engineer needs. Vess also clashes with Howard who represents the more old school hands on engineering, that ignores regulations and logic.

Lt. Saddiq Talib - Arabic male, 30-35. He serves as the Exodus' chief of security. For some reason developing this character hasn't come easily.

Chief Dexter Howard - Black male, 65-70 years old. Howard, according to any other captain, is too old, too far behind the times, and should be retired. Fortunately, he served as Chief of operations on the first ship Reyes served on as an ensign. So, when given command of Exodus Reyes specifically requests Howard. His relationship to Reyes can be summed up in this line he says to Reyes from the first episode, "I went from being the father you never had, to the only friend you'll ever have."

Doctor Kish - Klingon male, mid fifties. We all get Klingons: warriors, honor, and blood wine. But Kish offers something different: a thinking Klingon. An outcast in the Empire due to his choice of medicine over war, Kish takes advantage of the StarFleet/Klingon officer exchange to join the crew of the Exodus. Needless to say, Klingon medical ethics and practice will be a new experience for the crew.

Ensign Marah: Orion Female, mid twenties. She serves as the Exodus' helmsman. Although she just came from the academy, no one is sure about who she is or what her past has been like. It's revealed later that her mother is one of the most prominent figures in the powerful Orion crime syndicate.

Recurring Characters:
-One thing that is prevalent in modern tv dramas is the recurring character. Whether for a season or a series the recurring villains can be hated over time (see: Gul Dukat or Wey Un from DS9) Good or bad recurring characters also open up the possibility of continuing storylines and really building a mythos to work from and build upon. So, Ive included two recurring good guys and six recurring villains. They will be introduced as the first and second seasons play out. Let's start with the good guys:

Nurse Anne Cole: Human female, mid 20's. Someone pointed out all my main cast females were aliens. So, here is a recurring human female. She would be used as a foil to Dr. Kish.

Sub Lt. Li'Yol Nar -Romulan female, 110 years old. Li'Yol (shortened to Li once she becomes a regular) encounters the Exodus crew and especially Commander Allen repeatedly during season one. At the end of the season one finale, she would become a regular serving as the science officer, and Romulan liaison to the Federation aboard the Exodus. She and Allen would be the ongoing love story of the series, and her relationship with Vess acts as a parallel to the Romulan/Vulcan relationship.

Recurring Baddies:
The Aurelians- Using the Star Trek theme of using ancient Roman names - here are the Aurelians. These poor people lost their homeworld in a catastrophic natural disaster. Now the few thousand that remain roam the Divide like packs of wolves stealing, looting, and even killing to survive. The idea was to have a group of villains you could feel sympathy for.

Ensign James Mansfield - He serves on board the Exodus, but the crew doesn’t know that he belongs to a mysterious, secretive 'section' of StarFleet intelligence.

Origen- Clearly multi-species heritage, mid 30's. A genetically, and surgically enhanced bounty hunter who crosses the Exodus path on a few occasions pursuing different targets. He is considered the most ruthless, dangerous hunter in the quadrant.

Zoar - Orioin female, mid 40's. One of the most powerful crime lords in the quadrant. She is Marah's mother's chief rival in the Orion syndicate. And she tries to get to her enemy through Marah, which brings her into conflict with the Exodus crew. *I see Amanda Tapping of SG1 playing this role.

Talhaan - Cardassian male, mid 40's. Once one of Cardassia's most brilliant minds, watching his wife and young daughter burn to death in a fire during the Dominion War has driven Talhaan mad. He is now obsessed with the destructive power of fire. This would allow us to delve into the realm of madness of a pyromaniac and see just how deep into darkness grief could drive someone.

Aarron and Miriam (Mary) King- Human twins, about 25. These two will be a "Harry Mudd" type. Though not particularly malicious they are looking out for number one and looking to make a fortune. They are less like an enemy and more like an annoyance to the Exodus crew.

Well, those are the cast of characters and premise. I'll see what I can do about episodes soon. To avoid the confusion that sprang up last time I'll try to put forward a sort of 13 episode '1st season' of the show.


 





Episode 1 & 2: Pilot - Captain Joseph Reyes is given command of the Federation scout ship Exodus. However, a distress call from a distant outpost leads he and his crew to the Great Divide. Here they have to search for the mysterious race called the Aurelians. . .

Episode 3: Chthonian - A rare phenomenon where a gas giant loses the its atmosphere to a star's gravitational pull, is leaving behind a brief M class environment. An away team goes to investigate this unique phenomena, but a solar flare catches the venting atmosphere and the chain reaction disables the Exodus. Now the crew must hurry to save the stranded away team, who is litterally running for their live's from the setting sun. . .

Episode 4: Terror - The crew investigate a planetary nebula that contains a space dwelling lifeform. This alien emits as a defense mechanism a radiation that induces fear. This forces each crewmen to deal with thier own worst fears. . .

Episode 5: Crash - Reyes and his crew find an undiscovered miralce: an M class planet with rings. The radiation in the rings means sensors are severly limited, so away teams are sent to the surface. Soon, the Exodus strikes an unseen object. . . a cloaked Romulan science vessel.

Episode 6: Survivors - The Exodus and Romulan science vessel put the fledgling Federation-Romulan alliance to the test as they continue to try to repair their damaged ships. On the planet's surface, Commander Allen meets Sub Lt. Li'Yol of the Romulan vessel when he saves her from a predator. Unfortunately, the encounter leaves him wounded and dependant on Li'Yol to survive. . .

Episode 7: Wreckage - The Exodus survived but the extensive repairs have left the crew in desperate need of materials to finish the work with. Marah discovers a large ship graveyard with dozens of ships, shuttle pods, and probes with parts that could be salvaged. But the crew finds more than ghosts live in a graveyard as an Aurelian who has gone a little mad from isolation believes the junkyard is his home and that the Exodus should leave or join his collection. . .

Episode 8: Wanted - Twins Aarron and Miriam ask the Exodus crew to help them repair their damaged ship. The crew doesn't know that the two are wanted in the Klingon Empire, Cardassian Union, and even on some Federation planets. This brings bounty hunters from across the quadrant looking for the twins, including the danegerous Origen. . .

Episode 9: Toxin - After going on an away mission to a newly discovered planet, Marah becomes ill. Kish can't seem to find the problem when sudddenly crew members begin acting aggressive, immature, and even flirty. Kish must save Marah and find out what's happening to the crew. . .



 
Episode 10: Diplomacy - The planet Abdon which has survived for years, isolated in the nuetral zone is now ready to open trade to the either the Romulan Empire or the Federation. The Exodus crew are ordered to take a Federation ambassador to the summit. Allen is surprised when he sees Li'Yol across the room at the opening reception. However, isolationists soon hijack the summit. . .
Episode 11: Chase- Reyes decides his crew needs time to recover from the first year of their mission. So, they disembark for shore leave at a city native to the Divide use as a trading outpost. Marah tells Vess she'll take her out to experience what a "night of fun" is all about. However, Origen returns and begins to hunt Vess and Marah through the city. Soon Reyes and the crew find out the bounty hunter is working for a powerful member of the Orion Syndicate. .


Episode 12: Rescue- Marah's mysterious past is revealed asReyes and his crew's search for Marah takes them into Orion space. There they are sought out by Marah's mother, herself a powerful crime lord. She tells them her chief rival, Zoar, has taken Marah to use as leverage. Reyes and his crew must take on the most dangerous element of the Orion syndicate to get Marah back, and Marah must come to terms with her family legacy. . .

Episode 13: Return (season finale)- When investigating the remains of a Ferengi freighter that's been destroyed, the Exodus recieves a distress signal from a Romulan convoy. They arrive in time to rescue survivors from escape pods, one of which is Li'Yol. Li Yol tells Reyes and his crew disturbing news: the Borg have returned. . .

Season 2



 S2 Ep1: Malfunction - Reyes and his crew must find out why the Borg have returned, and save their next victims-14 million inhabitants in a pre-industrial civilization on an isolated planet. They also discover a startling revelation concerning the Borg's bizzare actions. . . ?

S2 Ep2: Pyro- While charting new systems near the edge of Cardassian space, the Exodus recieves a distress signal from a remote Cardassian outpost. Upon, arrival they find the "outpost" is really a prison colony, which is caught in a raging fire. This allows many of the convicts to escape, and the desperate Cardassian warden asks Reyes to help recover them. Soon the crew finds the fire and escapes were arranged by a brilliant but tormented Cardassian named Talhaan. . .

S2 Ep3: Mercy- Reyes and his crew find a pacifist group of Aurelians who only want to find a new homeland. However, their pacifism makes them an easy target for other bands of Aurelians. . .

S2 Ep4: Mirror part 1- Do to their warp field collapsing during an ion storm the Exodus is transported to a familiar parrallel universe. However, much has changed in the years since someone last stepped through the looking glass. Reyes and his crew decide to help the Terran Liberation Army retake Earth from the Klingons. . .


 


S2 Ep5: Mirror part 2 - In return for the Exodus help,the Terrans claim they will help the Exodus return home. However, the Reyes mirror counterpart is ordered to capture the Exodus before it can leave. It will be Exodus vs. Exodus in a bid to return home. . .

S2 Ep6: Carbon- The crew explores an unknown "carbon planet". Here carbon is part of the ecosystem in the way oxygen is a part of Earth's. This includes life forms which feed on oxygen to produce carbon, much like Earth plants consume carbon and produce oxygen. These lifeforms try to integrate the oxygen rich bodies of the crew into their environment- permanently. . .

S2 Ep7: Virus- The crew meet the friendly and welcoming race the Makas. There are few Makas living on their M-Class moon homeworld. However, not long after their arrival a disease begins sweeping through the Makas. Kish volunteers to help solve the problem. However, he turns to help from an unlikely source-the EMH Mark 5 (guest Robert Picardo). . .

S2 Ep8: Infant- The crew find a Breen infant in an escape pod. They take in the baby, which they nickname Moses, and search for his place of origin. They track him back to a devastated Breen ship in the Divide near Breen space, but when they board they find the ship was damaged in a Breen ?power struggle and has been rigged as a trap. . .

S2 Ep9: Gauntlet- The crew try to return the Breen infant, Moses, to his home. But to do it means crossing into Breen territory during an apparent civil war. They chose to pass through a nearby nebula only to find its filled with automated defenses from both sides of the conflict. . .

S2 Ep10: Conflict- The crew manages to return Moses to his clan in the troubled Breen Confederacy. They learn that the conflict is near an end, with Moses' clan seeking a decisive battle. Ensign George Mansfield recieves a communication from "Commander" Hunt who instructs him to change the Exodus' engine emmissions making it possible for the hostile Breen faction to find and attack the Exodus. Hunt tells Mansfield its in the Federation's best interest for Moses' clan to win the war. When the hostile Breen attack, Moses clan takes that opportunity to score a final victory and usher in a pro Federation Breen authority. . .

S2 Ep11: Components- While Li'Yol is supposedly on Romulus visiting her ailing mother, she sends Allen a message to come and see her. En route Allen is abducted by his "mirror" counterpart whose come to seize some of Allen's prosthetic body parts. Allen learns the "Li'Yol" he saw was in fact from the alternate universe and is married to his counterpart. . .

S2 Ep12: Thieves- When the first archeaological dig conduncted by the Federation in the Divide is robbed, Reyes is ordered to retreive the priceless artifacts. He knows "to catch a theif takes a theif" and so seeks the help of the twins Aarron and Mary King. But the twins may not be as reformed as they swear they are. . .

S2 Ep13: Fugitive- The crew encounter Arthur Craig (guest Hugh Laurie), a former member of Federation intelligence who was presumed killed during the Dominion War. Reyes is told to bring Craig to the Federation council for crimes of treason. Reyes feels he's not being told everything about this fugitive. Not only does Craig swear he's no traitor, but that he know's truths that could bring down the Federation. . .

S2 Ep 14: Prophet - The crew meets Adaiah, an Aurelian believed by his people to be a prophet. He claims to have predicted the destruction of the Aurelian homeworld, and now predicts the futures of several crewmen. He tells Kish he will not always be outcast from his people, and tells Allen his children will be from two worlds. But trouble arises with the leader of a powerful Aurelian sect when Adaiah tells Reyes he will lead the Aurelians to a new home world. . .

S2 Ep 15: Transference - A transport gone wrong and leaves Vess and Howard's consciousness each stranded in the other's body. This forces them to get along if they are ever to be put right again. . .

S2 Ep 16: Stories - A flashback to the time of the Dominion War, as Reyes tells Vess of how he came to be a captain. At the same time Allen shares with Li'Yol about the crash that caused him to need his prosthetic body parts. Later she reveals to him he may have had help surviving unconscious on the planet. . .

S2 Ep 17: Inferno -When the destruction of a small Romulan colony draws the attention of Reyes and his crew, Talhaan returns and seeks to "purify" an entire planet with the cleansing power of fire. . .

S2 Ep 18: Capture - Reyes is shocked when in an alien market place, he literally bumps into the supposedly dead Arthur Craig. This time Reyes won't let the sly Craig escape. But after his capture Craig is apparently killed in an escape attempt. . .

S2 Ep 19: "31"- The crewmen who had to kill Craig, Ensign Mansfield seems unnerved. Talib finds evidence that Craig may have had assistance escaping, from Mansfield. Reyes' investigation uncovers the fact that Mansfield may have been acting on orders of a powerful covert group to which Craig also belonged. Mansfield then makes his prearranged escape from the Exodus. . .

S2 Ep 20: Retribution - Zoar, who has had to fight for her power and life, comes after the Exodus crew for damaging her criminal empire. But this time her focus is on Capt. Reyes, and using Orion powers of persuasion to convince him to help her destroy the Exodus. Can the rest of the crew manage to stop her plans for retribution without their captain. . .


 

Ghostmojo

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Report this Jan. 09 2011, 3:46 am

Is Reyes a descendant of Monika from The X-Files?


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Vger23

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Report this Jan. 09 2011, 10:42 am

Constructive Comments:

1. Too much DS9-ish involvement of every Trek race ever created (Klingons, Romulans, Cardassians, Ferengi, Breen, etc...this tends to seem repetitive to what DS9 has already done.)

2. You've vastly OVERDONE the idea of having a diverse crew. It seems forced.

3. I like the idea of the USS Exodus as a scout ship, and not a Capitol Ship. I'd like to know more about her, as she is likely to be a "character" too.

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skynyrd04

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Report this Jan. 09 2011, 12:49 pm

Quote: Vger23 @ Jan. 09 2011, 10:42 am

Constructive Comments: 1. Too much DS9-ish involvement of every Trek race ever created (Klingons, Romulans, Cardassians, Ferengi, Breen, etc...this tends to seem repetitive to what DS9 has already done.) 2. You've vastly OVERDONE the idea of having a diverse crew. It seems forced. 3. I like the idea of the USS Exodus as a scout ship, and not a Capitol Ship. I'd like to know more about her, as she is likely to be a "character" too.


Thanks for the comments!
1. Although this territory touches space possesed by those races, that very fact has left it unexplored. So you can introduce new races like the Aurelians. Plus the fact that some races are present doesn't mean they drive the story. Talhaan the Cardassian for example could just as easily be a human arsenist.

2. I don't think this crew is anymore diverse than DS9 or Voyager's crew in terms of alien crewmen and humans from a non-North American background. I mean the Federation is diverse, but this would still be a story about the human experience.

3. I liked the idea of a smaller ship and crew. I had thought that since it was such a small ship in a remote area that due to lack of prestige Reyes would see that as Starfleet effectively exiling him.

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